Once apon a time it was a boys birthday they went out to time zone to play games it was bright when they came but when they left it was dark they felt like they went there for that long when they left they felt like they were there over night when they went home something wasn't right they tried opening the door but they a big cardboard cut out of there house fell over 'oh no!' said the boy, they then called the police they immediately started investigating they didn't find the house they started working harder and called in the SWAT they didn't find it so they worked harder and called in the detectives they didn't find it so they worked harder and called in the professionals they once again didn't find it and worked harder and this time they called in the finest workers in the world that work for a foundation called the SCP foundation but that is for a different story they told the boy that it was some were near the new houses but they cant go there so the boy and his brother went on a big adventure it took days but they finally made it the house was upgraded it was more modern so they settled in and they lived happy ever after.
Monday, May 10, 2021
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Hello, Jai. I found your story absolutely amazing reading It. The story reminded me of when I moved into my new house. Next time you could check the story, to make sure it has no errors and makes sense.
ReplyDeleteHi Jai its your friend Jacob. I like the story you wrote about. I think you could add more full stops, a little bit more grammar, and maybe check for spelling errors. I hope that helps you with your Future blogs. Bye!
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